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Author: bbarenblat

about/index.html

@@ -10,22 +10,21 @@ <h2 id="backups">
   Nightly backups
 </h2>
 <p>
-  Around 4 AM each day, two backups are performed: a monolithic backup
-  to restore the entire server in the event of a catastrophe, and an
-  individual backup for each user. At least 3 of the most recent
-  monolithic backups are kept at all times, in addition to some
-  historical backups that are encrypted and stored on separate
-  servers. The nightly, individual backups are available at
-  <code>/mit/sql/backup/</code>. The previous day&rsquo;s backup is also
-  available upon request.
-</p>
+  (sufficient to restore the entire server in the event of a
+  catastrophe) and an individual backup for each user. We maintain at
+  least the three most recent monolithic backups at all times, in
+  addition to some historical backups encrypted and stored
+  off-site. The nightly, individual backups are available at
+  <code>/mit/sql/backup/</code>, and the previous day&rsquo;s backup
+  is also available upon request.
+/p>
 <h2 id="software">
   Software stack
 </h2>
 <p>
-  sql.mit.edu currently runs the community edition of
-  MySQL. We&rsquo;ll be upgrading to MariaDB, the newest version of
-  the community-supported MySQL, when the servers are upgraded
+  sql.mit.edu currently runs the community edition of MySQL.
+  We&rsquo;ll be upgrading to MariaDB, the newest version of the
+  community-supported MySQL, when the servers are upgraded
   from <a href="http://www.debian.org/">Debian</a> 6.0 (squeeze) to
   Debian 7.0 (wheezy). The servers run the latest version
   of <a href="http://debathena.mit.edu/">Debathena</a> to integrate
@@ -50,7 +49,7 @@ <h2 id="software">
   of <a href="http://web.mit.edu/kerberos/">Kerberos</a>. Our servers
   never learn your password. In fact, your password never leaves your
   browser. Since the password isn&rsquo;t sent to the server,
-  there&rsquo;s no session to log in and out of&mdash;it&rsquo;s all
+  there&rsquo;s no session to log in and out of &ndash; it&rsquo;s all
   in your browser.
 </p>
 <h2 id="specs">

contact/index.html

@@ -10,7 +10,7 @@ <h2>
   I have a question
 </h2>
 <p>
-  Send us an email
+  Send us email
   at <a href="mailto:[email protected]">[email protected]</a>. We&rsquo;re happy to help!
 </p>
 <h2>
@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ <h2>
 <p>
   Let us know by reporting an issue
   on <a href="http://scripts.mit.edu/trac/">our issue-tracking
-  system</a>, or send an email
+  system</a>, or send email
   to <a href="mailto:[email protected]">[email protected]</a>.
 </p>
 <h2>

index.html

@@ -55,7 +55,7 @@ <h2>Powered by MariaDB</h2>
     </div><!-- /.span4 -->
     <div class="span4">
       <img src="/assets/img/samsung-840-pro.png">
-      <h2>SSD accelerated</h2>
+      <h2>SSD-accelerated</h2>
       <p>Live queries served by enterprise-grade SSDs, the fastest
         money can buy. In fact, they&rsquo;re so fast, our servers can&rsquo;t
         give them commands fast enough. Say goodbye to IO
@@ -65,10 +65,10 @@ <h2>SSD accelerated</h2>
     <div class="span4">
       <img src="/assets/img/wd-2tb.png">
       <h2>Ironclad backups</h2>
-      <p>Nightly, consistent backups of all databases. Made
+      <p>Nightly, consistent backups of all databases made
         available to you over AFS. Accidentally deleted all of your
-        user data? No problem, do you want yesterday&rsquo;s snapshot, or
-        the day before?</p>
+        data? No problem&mdash;do you want yesterday&rsquo;s snapshot, or
+        the one from the day before?</p>
       <p><a class="btn" href="/about/#backups">View details &raquo;</a></p>
     </div><!-- /.span4 -->
   </div><!-- /.row -->
@@ -77,9 +77,8 @@ <h2>Ironclad backups</h2>
   <div class="featurette">
     <img class="featurette-image pull-right" src="/assets/img/sliced-bread.jpg">
     <h2 class="featurette-heading">The best thing since sliced bread. <span class="muted">It&rsquo;ll blow your mind.</span></h2>
-    <p class="lead">No, really, we have a server called
-      sliced-bread that used to run our databases. This one is way
-      better.</p>
+    <p class="lead">It&rsquo;s true&mdash;sliced-bread.mit.edu was
+      a fine server.  But this one makes it look like burnt toast.</p>
   </div>
 
   <hr class="featurette-divider">

modal/password.html

@@ -7,20 +7,20 @@ <h3 id-"sql-modal-label">Change password</h3>
   </div>
   <form class="form-horizontal" id="change-password">
     <div class="control-group">
-      <label class="control-label" for="password">New Password</label>
+      <label class="control-label" for="password">New password</label>
       <div class="controls">
 	<input type="password" id="password" placeholder="Password">
       </div>
     </div>
     <div class="control-group">
-      <label class="control-label" for="confirmPassword">Confirm Password</label>
+      <label class="control-label" for="confirmPassword">Confirm password</label>
       <div class="controls">
-	<input type="password" id="confirmPassword" placeholder="Confirm Password">
+	<input type="password" id="confirmPassword" placeholder="Confirm password">
       </div>
     </div>
   </form>
 </div>
 <div class="modal-footer">
-  <a class="btn btn-primary" onclick="$('#change-password').submit();">Save Changes</a>
+  <a class="btn btn-primary" onclick="$('#change-password').submit();">Save changes</a>
   <a class="btn" data-dismiss="modal">Close</a>
 </div>

signup/index.html

@@ -15,8 +15,8 @@ <h2>
   an <a href="http://ist.mit.edu/athena">Athena</a> computer and
   run
   <pre>$ add scripts; signup-sql</pre> in a terminal. Then,
-  follow the on screen instructions. That&rsquo;s it, you&rsquo;re all
-  signed up!
+  follow the on screen instructions, and you&rsquo;ll be
+  ready to go!
 </p>
 <p>You can find out your username and password by running
   <pre>$ cat ~/.my.cnf</pre>
@@ -29,14 +29,14 @@ <h2>
   <a href="http://scripts.mit.edu/faq/58/who-is-a-locker-administrator">
     administrator privileges</a> on. If you&rsquo;re
   using <a href="http://scripts.mit.edu/">Scripts</a>
-  Autoinstallers, they&rsquo;ll automatically sign up for a
+  autoinstallers, they&rsquo;ll automatically sign up for a
   sql.mit.edu account if needed.
 </p>
 <h2>
   Don&rsquo;t have an Athena computer nearby?
 </h2>
 <p><a href="https://athena.dialup.mit.edu/">athena.dialup</a>
-  has you covered. Log in with your MIT Athena Account and run
+  has you covered. Log in with your MIT Athena account and run
   the commands there. You can also use <code>ssh
     [email protected]</code> from a Mac or Linux
   computer. If you&rsquo;re using Windows, you can download and